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Many people work long hours, having very little time for leisure activities. Does the situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays a majority of people are working for long, due to the reason, they have
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 to enjoy having fun. In my view, they would face with
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plenty of downsides in their life in near future,even though, some undeniable merits exist,perhaps the minus points outweigh to
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advantages
. I would point in
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benefits of mentioned issue, the prime one is that
,
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 they could earn more than others of their peers.
Although
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 it is not the fact all the
time
, the point is; if a person works more than others, he/she might get more than
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 most of the
time
.
For instance
, according to numerous interviews done by Russian socialists, some factories
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 tend to
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 almost all
day
 cuz to be paid better,
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 they can enjoy more welfare and
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fortune
furniture
 in their homes. The
second
 merit is that
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 they would become a master in that field as they work significantly so they probably gain proper experiences which can enable them to run their own business.
For example
, researchers in Moscow found that some ordinary carpenters who have worked for twelve
hours
 each
day
, after six months turned to skilled carpenters who now manage their own
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markets
. Turning to
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 of being busy most of
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day
, the
first
 minus point might be lead to mental health problems
such
 as anxiety or depression. According to Iranian
psycholists
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psychologists
, some after having tough
hours
 every
day
 for a long
time
, who could not find
time
 for
entertaiment
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entertainment
 activities, and under
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 of job
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 they felt nervous because they have to accomplish their job before a given deadline. The other withdraw is that many people can encounter
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physical issues. A study
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 by Iranian
phyicians
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physicians
, nations who are used
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 for long
hours
 are far more porn to get mobility problems in the future than
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 have normal working
hours
. To conclude, not having enough
time
 for recreational activities can lead to a number of difficulties which are named above,
However
, it brings some merits, the negative points took precedence over their benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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