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With many problems of transport and accommodation in cities, some governments are encouraging businesses to move to rural areas. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#transport #accommodation #cities #governments #businesses #move #areas #outweigh
chasing online
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 more widespread globally and not only for young people but in a different group of ages, in
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the advantages out of disadvantages of selling and buying throw the Internet. In
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 of advantages, purchasing online helps out a lot of people
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 cannot find time to go shop in light of the fact that they have to work long hours of the day so buying online would be an easy and helpful way
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 them.
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, it gives them a chance to compare the prices to other sites that sell the same items and products ,
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, Amazon sells a lot of stuff half price compared to other sites plus it has a good quality.
Furthermore
, I believe that the main reason that people swerved to online shopping is that there is no sales pressure.
However
, sometimes you may be manipulated by the seller that you buy from, so always be aware.
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, buying online cost a lot of abuse and troubles one of the problems is the long time the store takes to deliver a shipment to a client specifically if it is aboard shipments.
In addition
, you may be chated about the products you are buying the main reason given to support
this
 claim is that certain of individuals do not get exactly what they order sometimes they get a smaller size or bigger size than what th
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Alleviates
  • Economical benefits
  • Environmental conservation
  • Work-life balance
  • Urban congestion
  • Infrastructure limitations
  • Rural gentrification
  • Cultural heritage preservation
  • Green spaces
  • Skilled workforce
  • Decentralization
  • Sustainable development
  • Telecommuting
  • Rural revitalization
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