Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

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factors is tourism.

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activity is one of the greatest economical activities that

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incomes. Tourism always brings benefits for society and individuals, because

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type of industry demands a lot of services like transportation,

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consuming

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it helps to develop

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of working activities

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level and by obtaining experience, could become an expert. Nowadays is common that

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vacations, now the visitors want to live

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of experiences are growing so fast,

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the glamping travels.

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a mix between doing camping in a beautiful

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a bed and an individual shower;

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suffering the mosquito's bites. Tourism not only helps with economical incomes

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but

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, helps to spread the word of the

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attractions

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recommendations helps to increase the

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who want to experience the same trip. The

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travelers'

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visits

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jobs for the

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it is an important activity to develop in any

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and represents good incomes, and

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gives information about the specific place or

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we can see a transformation in the actual

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neccesities

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necessities

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and how the industry is transforming. The good

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new

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is that

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sector never will end and ensures jobs in the future.

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Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

Fully explain your ideas

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In order to learn the way other people in the world lives, it is better to look at film and video records than written documents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Unemployment is a growing problem all over the world. What are the causes of this? What could be done to help tackle this issue? To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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