Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

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Many factors are part of the

country

economy, one of

this

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factors is tourism.

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activity is one of the greatest economical activities that

helps

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help

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country's

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the country's

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incomes. Tourism always brings benefits for society and individuals, because

this

type of industry demands a lot of services like transportation,

accomodation

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accommodation

, food,

consumming

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consuming

goods, services.

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it helps to develop

other type

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another type

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of working activities

arround

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around

them. A lot of

people

can work,

eventhough

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even though

a particular person doesn't have a career or be a specialist, that person can start

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low

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level and by obtaining experience, could become an expert. Nowadays is common that

people

not only look for a beach

desstiny

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destiny

vacations, now the visitors want to live

a well-experienced travel

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well-experienced travel

a well-experienced journey

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That is

the reason that many sites or places that offer

these kind

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of experiences are growing so fast,

for

example

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the glamping travels.

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a mix between doing camping in a beautiful

ladscape

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landscape

and doing with all the luxury services like

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a bed and an individual shower;

withouth

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without

suffering the mosquito's bites. Tourism not only helps with economical incomes

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but

also

, helps to spread the word of the

country

atractions

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attractions

attraction

to others to visit, by

this

recommendations helps to increase the

people

who want to experience the same trip. The

continuos

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travelers'

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visits

ensures

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jobs for the

comunnity

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community

and it benefits all the persons. In

conclusion

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it is an important activity to develop in any

country

and represents good incomes, and

also

gives information about the specific place or

country

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we can see a transformation in the actual

travels

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travel

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neccesities

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necessities

of the

people

and how the industry is transforming. The good

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news

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new

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news

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is that

this

sector never will end and ensures jobs in the future.

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Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

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