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School should not force students who do not have natural ability for learning foreign language to study other language at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is argued that
children
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 should not be
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force
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 to study a foreign
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 at school.
Although
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 I believe that learning another
language
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 is important, I completely
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agree
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 that
children
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 should be encouraged to learn a foreign
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, not to be forced to learn it. On the one hand, it is undeniable that learning other
languages
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 is very useful for
children
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. Knowing different
language
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 help
children
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 have better chances
in
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 studying and working in the future.
For example
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,
th
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the
 most important
textbook
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textbooks
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 and journals now are in English so Vietnamese students who are good at English may access
to
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apply
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these materials easier, leading to a better result of studying. Fluence in many
languages
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 is
also
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 a benefit when people
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 for a job.
In addition
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, learning other
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 help
children
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 understand more about different traditions and cultures, which may encourage mutual understanding between people in different nations and promote
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globalisation.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 should not be forced to study a foreign
language
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 because of many reasons.
Firstly
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, learning under the pressure does not lead to a good result of studying
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children
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. In
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children
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 who have to learn what they do not like may not only feel
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 but
also
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 lose their passion and motivation in studying
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 and other subjects as well.
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Secondly
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,Secondly
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 some
children
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 do not have a natural ability to learn
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,
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, they are very good at other areas
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 as
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sciences
science
 or art.
Such
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children
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shoud
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should
 be encouraged to study what they are good at in order to have better development,
instead
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 of being forced to learn what they are unable to do. In conclusion, I believe that learning a foreign
language
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 is important but it should be considered as an optional subject, not as a compulsory subject for
children
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.

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