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Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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Education
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 is an essential part
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evryone
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everyone
everyone's
 life, but some children are deprived
from
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this
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.
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 it is sometimes thought
education
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 should be free to
students
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 from all economic backgrounds. In my opinion, I considered that University
education
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 ought to be free, as it will greatly benefit both individuals and society, but it has some drawbacks
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. A good reason to abolish school
fees
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 is that it gives people equal rights, whether they are rich or poor.
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, children from a poor family background are prevented
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 entering school or University because they are not able to pay these
fees
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.
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 excluded a large proportion of society and is discriminatory which can be avoided by getting rid of
tutions
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tuition
fees
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. Another point to consider is that having no
fees
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 at University means that
students
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 will not have to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs.
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,
students
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 have to work full-time or part-time while studying to pay their
fees
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.
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, Free
education
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 should,
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, produce
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better results as
students
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 will be able to concentrate on their studies.
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, having no
fees
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 at schools can lead to detrimental effects on society, as universities have no income from fess so, they would be
dependemt
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dependent
 on
government
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the government
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.
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, Government has already many expenses, and it can not take
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 burden.
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, minimum
fees
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 should be necessary for
education
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. In conclusion, free
education
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 is essential at all levels of
education
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, as it would be beneficial to
country
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the country
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. But, some disadvantages
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, and
it
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 should not be neglected.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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