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how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart illustrates how the unemployed in the united kingdom spent their time
last
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 year. It is clear from the chart that the percentage of women in the morning was the highest. According to what is shown, women in the morning spent much more hours especially in housework was 49% , while in the noon the percentage of the higher one was in housework to 21 per cent.
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, the lowest proportion with the same gender in the morning was in drinking at the rate 2 exactly, while in the afternoon staying in bed and playing sport was 0%.
on the other hand
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, men in the morning spent much more time especially in job hunting at the rate 22, while in the noon the percentage of TV was 14%.
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, the lowest proportion with the same gender in the morning was in drinking 2 per and cent exactly, while in the afternoon staying bed was at the rate 1. To sum up, we could say that both genders spent more time in the morning rather than the afternoon.
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