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Whether or not someone achieve their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#someone #luck
Some
people
 suppose that their achievements depend on their
luck
 but others think their effort is the most important reason for their success in their
life
. Achievements of aims are mostly by a question of
luck
 or not. It depends on
people
 personalities
Firstly
, In point of my view, I disagree with our aims are mostly by
luck
 in our
life
,
However
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, a lucky
person
 can achieve her or his goals quickly.
On the other hand
, If a
person
 works hard and has
luck
 in his or her work,
Finally
 he or she can receive goals.
Therefore
, trying hard and having a good
chance
 are mostly the reasons for our success in our
life
.
Secondly
, Intelligence
people
 have a timetable in their lifestyle and make an effort based on their decisions.
For instance
, einstein said: success comes for two reasons.
First
, your try and hardworking,
Second
, your final
chance
 and
luck
. If
people
 %95 try in their
life
 and just have %5
luck
, they can achieve their goals. Our daily
life
 consists of straightforward approaches and our tries. To conclude my essay, I have to mention that point, someone who wants to be a successful
person
 in our society, might make an effort and work hard and
subsequently
 achieve what he or she wants.
Chance
 and being a lucky
person
 are not in our hands for all of our
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life time
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, but when the
chance
 knocks on our doors, we should invite that into our home.
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