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In many countries, people do not recycle waste material, such as paper glass and cans. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve these problem?

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Many people worldwide do not recycle trash
matrials
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materials
such
 as
papaer
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paper
 , plastic tools, and
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metal
metallic
 cans.
This
 trend is due to negligence ,the
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absence
 of motivation, and environmental
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awareness
 ignorance.
However
, many
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 might alleviate
this
 problem. Most residents in big cities consume a large amount of
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 food, and
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unfortunately
 they are not keen to use the assigned recycling pins in order to get rid of packing paper and plastic boxes,
this
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 is a result because of the fast
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rhythm
 of
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modern life that keeps most people preoccupied and not focusing on their daily habits , and
this
 negligence
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considered
 the main reason for
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refraining
 from recycling.
Moreover
, families ,sometimes, are not aware of the importance of recycling and its vital role in protecting the environment and in delaying the accelerating global warming and
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think that it is the responsibility of the governments
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 the citizens.
Nevertheless
,
this
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dilemma
 might be tackled and alleviated ,mainly, by the governments of the concerned countries.
First
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 step could be an official
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awareness
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campaign
 through
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social media and
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television
televisions
 ,
demonstraiting
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demonstrating
 the importance of individual's participating in saving the
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ecosystem
 and
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 doing
this
 by the commitment to recycling.
Secondly
, local officials can pose legislations encouraging echo friendly lifestyle,
such
 as rewarding families that
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follow
 the
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recycling
 procedures and fining others that are not. To conclude,
although
 there is still
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 of recycling
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awareness
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 a large scale in
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, some simple
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actions by
actions
 governments might bring about very positive outcomes.
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