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There is a general increase in anti-social behaviours and lack of respect for others. What are the causes and solutions ?

#behaviours #lack #respect
Nowadays, there are a lot of
people
 who disrespect and have some anti-social behaviours towards others.
This
 essay will outline some reasons for
this
 problem before giving some viable solutions to tackle it. There are many reasons why adults and
children
 discriminate the other
people
 especially those who are black or coming from underprivileged families.
First
 of all, it is obvious that education plays a crucial role in teaching
children
 respect or act appropriately with others.
Therefore
,
children
 who do not receive parental guidance might have some inappropriate behaviours of
people
 around them.
For instance
,
children
 would disrespect the elderly or adults whenever they are not satisfied with something.
Secondly
, given the discrimination between the black and the white in Europe or America,
children
 who grow up in
this
 environment might have a higher chance of learning what other
people
 do in daily life and eventually form their own characteristics.
However
, some feasible solutions can be applied to remedy the aforementioned issues.
First
 of all, the government should allocate more funds to schools in order to promote them to teach
children
 how to become well-behaved citizens.
Furthermore
, parents
also
 play an indispensable part simply because
children
 would learn what parents do or react to in everyday life.
For example
, if parents disrespect or discriminate against other
people
,
children
 would definitely do the same thing with others.
Besides
, sending them to several educational programs
also
 support them to form a good character. In a nutshell, I firmly believe that if everyone is well-educated, the world would be an ideal place to live.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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