Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe that other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centres can provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Work has become
an
dispensable part of every person life as money is necessary, so both parents are working. Change the article
a
Although
it is sometimes thought grandparents
are the best option to take care of children
, others believed that children
can learne
many more things from Correct your spelling
learn
childcare
centres
. In my opinion, I considered that grandparents
could be taught an important skill to child
, but the importance of Add an article
the child
a child
childcare
centres
should not be neglacted
.
A good reason why Correct your spelling
neglected
grandparents
should look after to
the Change preposition
apply
child
is that they can teach them moral values and it Correct your spelling
is
it
not possible at daycare Correct your spelling
is
centres
because they have direct interaction with the child
, so child
can be learnt Add an article
the child
a child
sense
of Correct article usage
a sense
indentification
. Correct your spelling
identification
For example
, grandparents
tell them a stories
regarding personal and professional life from their experience, it can gain the intellectual development and Correct the article-noun agreement
a story
stories
charecter
traits. Correct your spelling
character
Therefore
, the closet members is
essential to Change the verb form
are
develope
Correct your spelling
develop
child's
growth.
Another point to consider why Correct article usage
a child's
grandparents
can take care of their children
is that they are very punctual as they do all things on time like giving a food
, Remove the article
food
a portion of food
to put
the Change the verb form
putting
child
into
sleep and Change preposition
to
go
for walking. they never missed the Wrong verb form
going
child
routine. For instance
, I remember when I was small I was looked after by my family members and they always take care of my habit as
regarding time. Change preposition
apply
Hence
, children
would be improved useful skills with grandparents
.
On the other hand
, in childcare
centres
Add a comma
,centres
children
grow socially and emotionally because children
play with other children
and learn communication. In addition
, teachers are always be
careful about Change the verb form
are always
child
development. Furthermore
, children
can teach there how to build Add an article
a relationship
relationship
with others. so, Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
Wrong verb form
putting
put
the Correct your spelling
but
children
into babycare centers
is not Change the spelling
centres
bad
idea.
In conclusion, working parents should put their Add an article
a bad
children
with grandparents
as they are very helpful to grow child
's personal life, but childcare
centres
has
own importance Change the verb form
have
also
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