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41. Describe a piece of equipment
that is
 important in your
home
. Human life has become more comfortable thanks to science. We are surrounded by electronic technology practically wherever we go, whether at
home
 or at
work
. At
home
, I have a personal
computer
 with the most recent setup. I bought it
last
 year on Apple official website, and it cost me a lot of money, it was about 3000
dollar
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. It is the quintessential Apple
computer
, a silver one with the Apple logo on
it’s
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its
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 back. When I’m at
home
, it’s the most precious thing to me. It aids me in a variety of ways. When I get
home
 after
work
, I get on the PC and listen to music. On occasion, my friend and I watch movies on the web. It has become an indispensable component of my daily routine. Despite the fact that it is just a small
computer
, I rely on
this
 device to meet my everyday demands. I
use
 it for my
work
,
use
 PowerPoint to prepare presentations, and
use
 some software to analyze
a
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large amounts of data.
Furthermore
, I
use
 it to attend some online classes to learn French after I
coming
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 back from
work
. Before
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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 pandemic, those institutes were offered us offline classes, but now they just offering online classes and using the
computer
 to attend a class is way better than using
smartphone
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 to study, since it has a larger screen and
high quality
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 audio system. So I think the
computer
 is
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indispensable
indispensible
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 thing in my current life.
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