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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, belive that school is the place to learn this.

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Children
 need a lot of attention from both
society
 and
parents
 to be good members of
society
. The
second
 home for
children
is
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school
 and they spend most of their time in
school
.
Therefore
,
schools
 have a great impact on
children
, but it has some consequences which will be demonstrated in the following. It is obvious that parent has the most effect on their offspring. A good parent which cares about their
children
, probably find a way or create
one
 to show and teach their kids to be effective in
society
. But if
parents
 don’t care about their
children
, it is less possible for to
children
 be effective as ones whose parent has taken care
themof
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them of
them
them off
.
Schools
 as the most important place for a kid who spends most of
one
’s time in it
,
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 has a great role in the
one
 confidence, behaviour and even career. A kid with a good background from his or her family can use the facilities of the
school
 very well to be successful and more confident. The problem with
schools
 inevitably is they use
one
 rule for all
students
 with different families.
Therefore
, in the best way, it produces some
students
 with the same knowledge, and behaviour.
Schools
 kill creativity most of the time. It’s like military service. Most of the
students
 after graduation from the
school
 do not know what should they do.
As a result
 of
this
 short essay, I can say
parents
 have more responsibilities to grow their kids. On the
one
 hand,
schools
 teach
students
 to be
a
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good, effective and hard workers in
society
, and
on the other hand
, they kill creativity. Good
parents
 by knowing their kids’ talents can invest in them to make them
a more effective members
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more effective members
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 of
society
.
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