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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days being self-employed has become a popular choice for lots of people, rather than being office workers in larger companies. Being in the highest position in the highest hierarchy
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 certainly has positive aspects for an employee,
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 career option. Clearly, there are major benefits to owning your own business. On
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 is that it provides more freedom to control your
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 conditions or working environments. In terms of being your own boss, a case in point is my parents, they have their own company and they don’t necessarily have to
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 at the office but at home. An additional reason that people opt for self-employment is the potential to earn more revenue. The income you earn ought to be from your hard
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 and experiences individually, as it would not be shared with anyone. To illustrate, freelancers get paid based on how much effort they have done.
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, the problem is that if they are going through a severe injury and unable to
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 for them to earn any revenue. In comparison, office workers who
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 in a larger firm would still get paid a salary at the end of every month and they
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 get sick leave.
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 even more common downside, being the boss and having to manage every single process could be a source of the serious cause of stress and
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 a lack of personal
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 and could eventually find no time for yourself. In conclusion, I would once again reaffirm that being self-employed offers both beneficial and disadvantageous perspectives.
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, it is essential that we aim for a healthy life balance as it could reduce tension and allow us to lead a smoother way of life irrespective of whether we
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 for ourselves or a corporation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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