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Some feel that schools should be mixed with both girls and boys attending while others feel the genders ought to be separated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#feel #schools #girls #boys #genders
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Although
 some believe that if your
job
 position doesn’t meet your needs, but the amount of salary you give was perfect, you don’t
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to
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complain. But I have to disagree almost entirely with their opinion. To support my opinion, I would say that if you don’t satisfy with your
job
, your life will be a repetition situation for you. Imagine that if you just go to work because of the salary, how will you take benefits from the age
your
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 are in?
This
 kind of working is somehow like you just wanna waste the rest of your life. Doing what you actually don’t enjoy can make you an angry person because of the pressures which that awful
job
 put on you.
On the other hand
, if you do what you’re actually the best
on
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it
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 and you interested in
,
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 makes you a happier person. You will go to
job
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 not only for the salary, but
also
 you find that position a part of yourself. You know that by that
job
, you are able to meet your needs. So, it’s better to work for yourself m, actually for your soul, because our life is temporary and we have to enjoy it. You have to
chose
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 a
job
 which
made
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 for you and you shouldn’t pay attention to those who say just how much money you give is important.
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