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People in big cities are facing many health challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What causes air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

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Pollution
 has become a big problem across the world and needs to be prevented.
people
 are facing many
health
 challenges all around the earth because of a high level of
air
pollution
. In
this
 essay, I will explain the causes of
air
pollution
 and I will suggest
a possible solutions
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possible solutions
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 to
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solve
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slove
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 the problem. A good reason why
air
pollution
 is increasing is nothing but
a
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the
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 overuse of vehicles.
People
 are using more personal vehicle to go everywhere rather than public transport, so there
are
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 too much carbon monoxide in the
air
 and it is very dangerous for
health
.
Furthermore
, Big cities have many industries
who
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that
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 emit harmful gases in the
air
, humans are directed infected by them and they may have
a lung problems
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lung problems
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.
Therefore
, it can say
air
pollution
 is a challenging issue because of factories and
vehicle
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vehicles
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. Another point to consider that rising
air
pollution
 is that big cities have taken a place of trees.
For instance
, many tall buildings in urban areas are built by deforestation, so they do not have any factor to protect the
pollution
.
In addition
,
people
 can not get fresh
air
 and are affected by many
health
 issues.
On the other hand
, there are numerous ways to stop it.
Firstly
,
government
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 should encourage
people
 to use public transport
instead
 of their own vehicle.
Secondly
, the owners of a big industry should have a proper system to relieve the detrimental gases.
Finally
, it is needed to plant more trees around the city. In conclusion,
air
pollution
 is
a
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challenging for big cities as it has many
health
 problems but it can be solved.
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