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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days fast
food
 is becoming an un-separatable part of our life. Some people believed that
this
 has a destructive influence on our lifestyle and diet. I strongly agree with
this
 statement because it could have so many negative effects on both our
health
 and our way of life.
First
 and foremost, by using too much fast
food
 we will suffer from so many
health
 problems. Being full of oil, salt and other additives, fast
food
 could cause lots of diseases. As we know, for preparing these tasty
foods
, manufacturers use too much oil and salt which are the main causes of heart attack by blocking the vessels and stopping the blood flow through them.
Furthermore
, because these processed
foods
 contain lots of fat and calories, consuming them will lead to obesity which is one of the main reasons for severe illnesses
such
 as high blood pressure or cholesterol, and
also
 excess
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weight
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wight
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weight
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 puts lots of strain on
heart
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 again.
As a result
, certainly, we have to decrease the usage of fast
food
 in our diet to enjoy our well-being.
In addition
, consuming fast
food
 make the family members lazier
,
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 because it is more convenient to buy readymade and semi-prepared
food
instead
 of spending hours
to cook
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 it at home.
As a result
, whenever the family members become hungry their
food
 is in the cabinet and it takes less than 5 minutes to be prepared or just by a phone call, they are able to order their
food
.
As a result
, unconsciously and unintentionally, it has negative effects on family coherence because they are not going to sit around the table and enjoy their meals together which means the unity of the families gradually will be destroyed. Despite
this
, some may argue that fast
foods
 are not expensive so they can afford
it
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them
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.
However
, I do not feel that because the
food
 value in these
foods
 is not too much so after a while, for sure they will suffer from different
disease
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 and as we know the price of medical care is much higher than buying healthy and nutritious
food
, so we have to invest for our
health
 by eating the
food
 full of vitamins and minerals
instead
 of suffering from serious
health
 complications. In conclusion, as reiterated before by using fast
food
 we will suffer from illnesses in short-term and many negative changes in our
life style
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 in long run.
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