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The most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #transport #cities #people #suburbs #countryside
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Some
people
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 believed that the most practical way for solving traffic and transport problems in towns is to discourage individuals not to
move
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 to
cities
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 from
suburbs
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the suburbs
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 and
countryside
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. It may be a good solution but it could not
the
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 most effective remedy for
this
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 matter. I strongly disagree with the idea for the given reasons. It is irrefutable that we pay
tax
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the tax
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 that the government spend it on improving transportation system and roads as much as needed;
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, banning
people
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 to migrate to
cities
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 from
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countryside
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the countryside
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 is the simplest way for authorities not to do their responsibility properly.
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, by improving the infrastructures and long-term urban architectural plans it would be possible to control traffic congestions and to solve transportation problems even if too many
people
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 decided to
move
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 to bigger
cities
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.
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, it is impossible to stop
people
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 to
move
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 to bigger
cities
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 because of
lots
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the lots
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 of opportunities they may have in bigger
cities
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.
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, let’s think about a person who
accepted
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was accepted
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in
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into
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university
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a university
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 in a big town he moved from his small
countryside
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 to that city. After his graduation he found a good career, he married in
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 city, and after a
while
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,while
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 their new baby was born.
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 family has lived in
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 city for many years and it looks impossible to ask them to go back to their rural life again. So, by convincing
people
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 not to come to
cities
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 there is no guarantee that they would not migrate because when they decided to
move
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, they have adequate reasons to leave their comfort zones and experience new challenges.
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, the problem of transport and traffic congestion is not going to solve by encouraging individuals to stay in their
countryside
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