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•Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people can not expect enjoy a job and that having a permanent job is more important. •Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people choose their
job
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 occupations based on the income, some
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, on the other hand,
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on the other hand
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 are crucial to having their favourite hobby as their profession.
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, it is still undisclosed which
one
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 of the appr0aches is rather a key to a successful and happy
life
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. In
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 I will examine both views and state my personal opinion. Considering that people spend more than half of their day at their jobs, which adds up to them spending the majority of their
life
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 working, it seems to be important for the occupation to be satisfactory and exciting. As humans tend to be more productive and motivated
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 while doing the things they truly enjoy. So from
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 perspective, we could assume, that unless a worker is satisfied with their
job
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, they will not be able to exert in their
perfomance
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performance
.
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,
job
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 security can come up as important to
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person
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a person
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 who has experienced unstable income in their adolescence and is simply seeking a calmer way of living. Provided that, we cannot argue that a permanent
job
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 is a major factor in
one
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's content
life
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. In my opinion, having a satisfactory
job
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 with a great wage is an enormous luxury in
life
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, that not everyone is fortunate to acquire in
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life
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. Whereas, working hard and steadily moving upwards in your career, which will conclude in having a high paying profession, is something that each
one
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 of us can attain while working hard. To conclude, each
one
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 of us chooses our own paths in
life
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, while
one
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's are ready to take a leap and follow their passion, others may take a steadier road to their successful
life
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.
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