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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
Social
media
 is getting worse
day
 by
day
. We use it as a program to relieve stress
from
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all
day
 but
in
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nowadays, social
media
 affect
to
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 much
to
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 our
live
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. My opinion is about
to reduce
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 time using social
media
 in a
day
. A lot of bad situations that caused by social
media
such
 as some
people
give
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 wrong information on their page, it’s made so many other
people
being confuse
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 and have a wrong vision about the situation. If you
offense
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 someone on the internet, the netizens will have so many bad words to say to
yours
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 enemy
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with out
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 knowledge. Not only affect
to
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someone’s images but it
also
spend
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 a vast of time for some
people
using
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 it. A few
people
 usually spend so much time in a
day
 just
surf
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 the internet. That can cause a lot of
problem
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 in their life. Using
internet
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 is not bad, but using it
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with out
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 knowledge can affect
to
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communities and yourself too. We should prepare lore before going to the social
media
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