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four kinds of food in chain and India compared to the average consumption of that food in the world in 2008.

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The given pie charts illustrate the information about the
consumption
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 of four kinds of
food
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 in chain and
India
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 compared to the average
consumption
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 of that
food
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 in the
world
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 in 2008. The general overview here is that all two countries consumed processed
food
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 the most which was a similar pattern of the average
consumption
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 in the
world
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 over the period observed. According to the charts, it can be seen that the
world
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 population consumed 41% of processed
food
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 as composed to
China
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 and
India
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 at 34% and 39% respectively.
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, The respective higher amount of vegetables and fruits consumed were seen in
China
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 and the worlds average around 32% and 29%, whereas
this
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 figure was only 23% in
India
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. In terms of animal
food
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, the
world
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 and
India
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 shared a similar extent of approximately 26-27% of their
consumption
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,while there was only 15% of which that in
China
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,which was the lowest amount of its
consumption
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.
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, neither the
world
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 and
India
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 consumed the least of nuts and seeds which accounted for 4% and 11% consecutively.
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,
China
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 indicated roughly 19% of
this
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food
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 kind.
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