Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Public concern has arisen about whether
people
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should accept a bad
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such
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as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money or try and improve
such
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situations
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. I believe that
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definitely should try and improve a bad
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due
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the following reasons.
People
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are supposed to be responsible for their own
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.
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with, being responsible means trying to find solutions.
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, making some efforts to improve a bad
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could be done in
certain
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way like communicate with other
people
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or relations to get some
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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of how to start a simple and personal business. Establishing
personal
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business will deliver more benefits than being an employee because it will give
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more flexibility in terms of work
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and money management.
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,
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courage to improve a bad
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will lead to a resilient individual so in the future
people
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will be tough to face
another bad
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another bad situation
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situations
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.
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, some
people
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might claim that improving bad
situations
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will lead to nothing.
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, in
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day
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everything can be converted into money if
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are serious enough to work. An opportunity can be created if
people
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are willing to do something than just accepting their life goes into a bad circumstance. Admittedly, in certain
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case
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people
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should accept a bad
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only if they already do best efforts. Accepting a bad
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does not mean that
people
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should let a bad
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disrupts their life. In sum,
people
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should make some corrective actions to improve their
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. In
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way,
people
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will be able to live in
a better
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a better situation
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situations
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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