Violence in the media promote violence in society. To what extent do you agree?

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I do agree that violence in
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social media could promote violence in society, For the reason that nowadays people are almost an internet's slaves. Many people tend to follow the masses or the crowds, As they don't want to be excluded from
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society, They don't want to be different from the majority in
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bad
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. These may not sound related to the topic but it's actually the same thing as what
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happening in our world right now. When we see something very often, We slowly get attached
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it.
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YouTube channel for 5 months, Their content is about eating.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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