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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
Direct voice communication is the use of voice to express emotions and convey information to
people
 in order to establish relationships in society. along with the process of international integration, the cultural and social connection of the countries together. In the era of development, technology 4.0 is getting stronger and stronger. So was there the birth of a virtual lifestyle? Virtual living is an unrealistic lifestyle, unlike the real situation of
people
 on social
networks
. Currently, virtual living is a trend of the young generation, an outrageous lifestyle, an illusion of the present life. The cause of
a
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virtual life is that the
world
 spends most of its time on Facebook, Instagram, bragging about life.
However
, modernity
also
 helps us to solve some distant problems in the fastest and most compact way. Currently , the epidemic is spreading all over the
world
 , but because of social
networks
 , technology helps us to spread positivity and joy
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everywhere ; and at the same time make it easier for us to educate and propagate.
In addition
, there are a number of websites where the incident is unknown but hastily posted on social
networks
, causing confusion in public opinion and affecting all aspects.
For example
, about 3 years ago, there was an announcement that in December of that year will be the end of the
world
, causing
people
 to panic and buy a lot of food, which is
also
 an untrue event that causes fear to everyone. But we are living in the 4.0 technology era, so it is impossible not to use social
networks
, we will not know anything about the
world
, cannot contact
people
 who are far away, cannot solve problems in the fastest way, if students do not understand the lesson, they cannot go online to listen to lectures or learn more about knowledge.
Therefore
, we need to educate and propagate how to use social
networks
 properly with everyone, but we cannot remove social
networks
 because it is equally important. Thanks for reading❤️
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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