It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

I think
social
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the social
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network is a double-edged sword, if we know how to use
it
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, it's very good,
social
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the social
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network has so many good sides, but I think in life now it's not as good as people expect
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The harm that it brings
such
as :reduce human-to-human interaction ,distracting personal goals , risk of
depression
, killing creativity,insomnia,there were
rumors
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of social networking sites selling
users
' personal
information
, adding more risks from hackers and viruses. These all warn that personal privacy is gradually lost while social
networks
grow.We can have personal
information
stolen, they use it to do bad things.
Depression
is
also
a consequence of using social networking sites with
users
. The "virtual" communication reduces the need for face-to-face communication, resulting in
users
talking less, less interacting with people. Negative
information
and comments on social
networks
, especially
facebook
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Facebook
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, when not seen as sober,
also
lead to expressions of sadness,
depression
, pessimism, despair, etc. Many
users
have committed suicide after receiving it. malicious comments or being ostracized, isolated on social
networks
. Long-term use of social
networks
leads to insomnia, anxiety, stress, etc., these factors are
favorable
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conditions for the onset of
depression
, worsening of
depression
and vice versa. Even many
users
do not want to communicate in real but just stay at home to perform "virtual" communication.Risk of exposure to inaccurate and unhealthy
information
:as a channel to receive
information
,
however
, the
information
on social
networks
is not verified, leading to many inaccurate
information
, misleading content or "joke"
information
, "like sentences". , "sensation" makes
users
often fall into a state of stress, nervousness, and anxiety.But I think it's not yet time to say goodbye,
instead
we should take advantage of the good and eliminate the bad
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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