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Directors of large organisation earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. some people think it is necessary, but others hold that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In enormous companies and
organisation
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organisations
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, high
salaries
 have belonged to
directors
 that their labours. Some people suppose that
work
 is essential, but others think that it is unnecessary and unrighteous.
To begin
 with, the job is necessary for all the people,
therefore
, a person who is a director or employee need a job.
However
, the labour's
work
 is important to the majority of organisations but management of the
organisation
, who are managing their labourer's
work
.
In addition
, when the managers of organisations make a plan and organise the timetable and the goals of their organisations, and their staff and
employees
 must move on their lines.
Furthermore
, human
right
organisation
 emphasise
employees's
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employees'
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right
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rights
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 and in developing and developed countries are existed a majority of rules to protect staff and
employees
 rights. In point of my view, both of them is important. Pay high
salaries
 to
directors
 of an industry or an
organisation
 to make
right
 lines
right
 lines for improving their works and equally pay
right
salaries
 to their
employees
.
Directors
 and their staffs have linking relations and when each person doesn't
work
 effectively, eventually
that is
 to lead an unstable situation. To conclude my essay equally
salaries
 were been part of the soviet union and all of the people saw that bad effects on their society. So paying higher
salaries
 to
directors
 are encouraging them to good managing their workers.
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