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the three various cities in terms of an average monthly temperature and an average amount of hour of sunshine per year.

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The given line graph and bar chart illustrate the information about the three various cities in terms of an average monthly temperature and an average amount of
hours
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 of sunshine per year. The general overview here is that
London
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 is the coldest city and has the fewest
hours
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 of sunshine. New
York
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 had the hottest summers, but Sydney enjoys the warmest overall climate. It can be seen that
London
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 and New
York
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 followed a similar from
January
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 to December. An increasing temperature was seen in both cities,with
London
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 rising from 9
degrees
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 in
January
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 to the peak at 18
degrees
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 in July, and New
York
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 increasing from under 4
degrees
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 in
January
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 to the peak at almost 30
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 in July. After which there was a sharp fall with both rates reaching an all-time low of 10
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 in
London
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 in December and 5
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 in New
York
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 at the same time. Sydney,
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, it was experienced a downward trend in its temperature number between
January
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 to July, dropping from over 25
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 to exactly 25%.
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, 5 mounts later, its
degrees
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 reached the same degree in
January
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. In terms of the number of
hours
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 of sunshine, the lowest amount was occupied by 1180
hours
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 in
London
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 per year, whereas New
York
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 and Sydney indicated the same high number, accounting for 2535 and 2473
hours
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 per year respectively.

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