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five various product category in term of the number of export earnings and the change of values proportion from 2015 to 2016.

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The given bar chart and table illustrate the information about five various product categories in terms of the number of export earnings and the change of values proportion from 2015 to 2016. The general overview here is that the majority of export earnings was petroleum
products
, and the values of gems and jewellery experienced a downward trend, while the other
products
 increased. It can be seen that an export earnings increase was seen in three
products
, petroleum product and engineered goods, rising from 60
billion
dollars
 and under 60
billion
dollars
 in 2015 respectively to over 60
billion
dollars
 in each in 2016, and Textiles increased from under 30
billion
dollars
 to approximately 32
billion
dollars
 in the same time.
On the contrary
, Gems and jewellery experience a sight decrease to exactly 40
billion
dollars
 a year later.
However
, there was a period of stability of 30
billion
dollars
 in the figure for agricultural
products
 over the period. In terms of the values, from 2015 to 2016, there was a dramatic increase in textiles proportion of 15.24%.
Similarly
, the number of Engineered goods rose moderately by 8.5% after passing one year, While petroleum
products
 and agricultural
products
 indicated a mere growth of 3% and only 0.81% in 2016.
On the other hand
, the proportion of gems and jewellery dropped gradually by 5.18% over the duration observed.
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