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successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#sports #professionals #money #people #professions
As a fan of many types of
sports
, I am
nevertheless
 surprised knowing that successful sportsmen, Jordan,
for example
, can earn much more money than other successful
professionals
 in other sectors. I know that some
people
 think it is fully justified
,
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 because to be successful in
sports
, a person must be trained from the very early childhood and has to work very hard every day. They have to sacrifice many joys in their life in order to save time for practice, for becoming stronger and better skilled. And they have a very risky life – a lot of injuries may happen during the games and competitions that may lead to long-term health effects
such
 as cracked bones or disability
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 the rest of their life, or even to death. That’s
also
 the reason why many
sports
professionals
 cannot sustain their job for long. As a matter of fact, they will see degradation in their performance after reaching the age of 40, and
then
, it will be difficult for them to have good earnings.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that it is unfair that successful
sports
professionals
 can earn more than, say, well-known scientists. These
people
 think that a scientist uses his brain and works very hard days and nights. And his invention can lead to a very big change
to
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 the whole world. Think about
vaccine
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 against Covid 19.
Therefore
, how can David Beckham earn a million dollars just from an advertisement on TV, while a Nobel prize winner for physics earns only several hundred thousand dollars a year? It’s totally unfair. My point is there should be a better scheme for wealth allocation
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 so that successful and talented
people
 in other sectors can be paid better. Possibly a good taxation system can help to do it. So on the one hand,
sports
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people
 can still be highly paid for their efforts, but
on the other hand
, other
professionals
 in other sectors can
also
 be recognized for their works and contribution to society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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