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Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development？

#countries #success #facilities #train #athletes #sports #development？
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 on the government political view
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 situation. Let's see each position, and find which method is better for country
sport
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, especially for
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sportsmen
 who give all their life for
traning
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training
 and might be for Olimpic Game. On the one hand, providing better facilities for top athletes is a good choice, because they already show some result, and subsidizing them give more chance to get
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 result in each discipline. Traning and
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 to some
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sport
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 events it's very important for top sportsmen, and they try all their best to achieve
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result
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.
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in
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 top sportsmen save budget because no need
train
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 them from the beginning.
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 method is suitable for countries
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 as the USA, UK or other same nations
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 because finance takes
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 place in
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 question.
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, How to select top sportsmen from the population. They can't be stright
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 a good sportsman. How to find
best
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 one from the nation. In
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case
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 need to build facilities for all citizens.
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is give
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 an opportunity for all and especially for young people, to try their skills in
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, and might be one of them can be a future Olipmic winner.
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,
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sport
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 buildings, special areas make the nation
more
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healthier. In
fact
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this
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play
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 a good role in population health. In conclusion, we can say that
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 more attention to
sport
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 in common
it
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has good results. And have an indirect effect
for
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country
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the country
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, government and nation.
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