In recent times, many people have focused on the negative effects advertising has on children’s health, behaviour and family relationships. Advertising to children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the past few decades, we notice lots of
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having
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as their audiences. Many argue on the effects of advertising
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children
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as it creates
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of negative impacts on
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children’s
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well-being. I strongly agree
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proposal and I will provide some reasons and examples in my essay.
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, advertising to
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should be banned because it has tremendous effects on young’s health.
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of the food that
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being advertised are genetically modified and contain lots of chemicals
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as artificial colouring and preservatives.
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, the fries that all kids love to eat, contain hydrogenated vegetable oil to preserve their texture and colour.
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potentially harmful substance can cause lots of diseases
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as eczema, allergy reactions and shortness of breath that could lead to asthma.
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, food that
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advertised
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high in calories.
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, obesity in
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has remarkably increased in
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recent years.
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, I completely insist that
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should be restricted as it is
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affecting
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children’s
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behaviour. There are many adverts
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luxury lifestyles that are not reasonably priced, especially for
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families.
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, an advert
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a toy or gadget can influence
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to force their parents to purchase one.
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action
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pressure to the parents. Apart from that, advertisement always shows
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relationship. As long as they can sell their products, the advertiser will do anything including interfering with
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children’s
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emotion
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.
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,
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will compare and doubt the love of their own parents towards them and
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interrupt family relationships. In conclusion, I utterly agree that
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advertisements
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that aim
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children
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at children
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as their
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viewers
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should be banned in order to have
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healthy and proactive future generations. I strongly
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the higher authorities to take action on
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matter as soon as possible to preserve the quality of our
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children’s
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health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vulnerability
  • critical thinking
  • childhood obesity
  • materialistic
  • consumerism
  • conflict
  • regulations
  • ethical marketing
  • media literacy
  • unrealistic standards
  • body image
  • parental controls
  • freedom of speech
  • purchasing decisions
  • advertising content
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