In recent times, many people have focused on the negative effects advertising has on children’s health, behaviour and family relationships. Advertising to children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the past few decades, we notice lots of

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having

children

as their audiences. Many argue on the effects of advertising

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children

as it creates

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of negative impacts on

children’s

well-being. I strongly agree

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this

proposal and I will provide some reasons and examples in my essay.

Firstly

, advertising to

children

should be banned because it has tremendous effects on young’s health.

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of the food that

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being advertised are genetically modified and contain lots of chemicals

such

as artificial colouring and preservatives.

For instance

, the fries that all kids love to eat, contain hydrogenated vegetable oil to preserve their texture and colour.

This

potentially harmful substance can cause lots of diseases

such

as eczema, allergy reactions and shortness of breath that could lead to asthma.

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, food that

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advertised

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high in calories.

Consequently

, obesity in

children

has remarkably increased in

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recent years.

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, I completely insist that

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should be restricted as it is

also

affecting

children’s

behaviour. There are many adverts

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luxury lifestyles that are not reasonably priced, especially for

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families.

For example

, an advert

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a toy or gadget can influence

children

to force their parents to purchase one.

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action

consequently

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pressure to the parents. Apart from that, advertisement always shows

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the fake

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relationship. As long as they can sell their products, the advertiser will do anything including interfering with

children’s

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emotions

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.

As a result

,

children

will compare and doubt the love of their own parents towards them and

hence

interrupt family relationships. In conclusion, I utterly agree that

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advertisements

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that aim

children

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at children

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as their

viewer

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viewers

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should be banned in order to have

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healthy and proactive future generations. I strongly

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the higher authorities to take action on

this

matter as soon as possible to preserve the quality of our

children’s

health.