Some people say that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementary schoolsuch as reading,writing and math How far do you agree or disagree?

To introduce with, reading, writing and math
computer
skills
are very crucial and they should be included in the school's curriculum. I strongly agree with the statement and in
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I will explain my point of view.
First
of all advancement in technology is happening at a very rapid rate and
as a result
of
this
computers
are the future. There is not a single place where people are not using
computers
.
For instance
, from school to business
computers
are basic necessities. It would be great if
this
skill is introduced as a subject at an early age.
Also
, the children are in a growing stage, their mind is still developing due to
this
they have good capacity to learn, they catch things easily and
also
have the ability to retain for a long time.
Furthermore
,
this
skill will help them in future.
For example
, at a
,
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workplace it will become easier to give presentations, save data and information with the help of the
computer
. Not only
this
,
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but,
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computers
are
also
proved to be
a
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great assistance in businesses . There are certain software or apps which are needed when one is doing business.
Computer
skills
come at hand at
such
times.
However
, there are some people who reject
this
notion as they believe learning
computer
skills
is difficult for children. Teaching new
skills
put a lot of stress on a child's mind and
this
will lead to diverting their attention from the main subjects and affect their overall performance. In a nutshell, with no doubt learning
computer
skills
is essential, it should be introduced as soon as possible, in elementary school.
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