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The digital age has made the gap between the younger and older generations wider. Give reasons for your own answer.

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age
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 with the prevalence of technology, it makes sense to say that we are all tech-savvy, especially the youth.
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, when it comes to the older generation, they
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 it hard to adapt to life, which depends on modern devices. Some
people
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 the digital world has made the chasm between the
two
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generations
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 bigger day by day. In my perspective, I absolutely agree with
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 statement for some reasons which I will discuss more in the following paragraph.
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, the difference in bringing up
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fast
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 growth of technology between
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two
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the two
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generations
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, the mental framework differs from each other. Mostly, our parents were born in a period of time when the world had not yet developed and many economic crises had taken place.
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, they are more likely to be frugal and interested in spiritual activities as they
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 gone through a hard time.
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, the mass of media
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 improved at speed,
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, they are rushed to change their ways of living life that depend on technology.
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, teenagers are
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 good at using modern devices and they
take
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use
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 them as a tool to communicate.
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, the
two
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generations
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 can not have the same channel to express themselves.
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 is the difference in recreational activities. In the digital
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, young
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 find social media or games as a way to entertain themselves. But when it comes to family gatherings, these activities have seemed unconventional by the elderly as they believe time should be spent on enhancing members’ attachment. Older
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 often judge teenagers' use of digital gadgets
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 younger
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 take it for granted. As they can not respect each other likes and opinions, the
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generations
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 can not live in peace. In conclusion, the digital
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 has a very big effect on the
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generations
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 gap. Especially are differences in communication, thoughts and
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 interests. It is hard for both
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 groups to get along well with each other if there are so many contrarieties.

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task response
Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and presents relevant ideas. However, the examples provided could be more specific and detailed to further support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is generally clear, and an introduction and conclusion are present. However, there are areas where the coherence and cohesion could be improved through better organization of ideas and smoother transitions between paragraphs.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is fairly good, and you demonstrate a range of words and phrases. To improve further, try to use more precise and academic vocabulary and pay attention to collocations and word forms.
grammatical range
Your essay shows a good command of grammar, with mostly accurate and varied sentence structures. However, there are occasional errors in sentence structure and word choice. Pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and use of articles.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital age
  • gap
  • younger generation
  • older generation
  • technological advancements
  • rapid pace of change
  • overwhelming
  • adept
  • digital devices
  • communicate
  • interact
  • resistant
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • reliance
  • divide
  • attitudes
  • privacy
  • online security
  • widening
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