The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

It is considered by many that vogue
industry
and sales of different
products
may influences
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to
people
to try to be same each other and I agree.
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of buying different
products
,
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people
many times
prefer
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buy the most
popularity
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products
to stay fashionable.
Firstly
, many
people
are influenced by
vogue
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the vogue
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industry
because
this
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these
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bussines
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business
try to sell the same product with an
importan
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important
or famous person. In fact,
specially
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youths
wants
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to
imitated
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imitate
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either the clothes or some cars to
demostrates
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demonstrate
demonstrates
other
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status,
this
can be
afect
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affect
in the behaviour and
encourage
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encouragement
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to
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people
to obtain the same
products
to
another persons
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another person
other persons
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.
For example
in Chile, if a futbolist in
a
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adverstiment
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advertisement
appear with
a
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special sneakers, many mas
wants
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to be like him buying the
samen
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same
products
.
Secondly
, the capacity to copy each other is a natural behaviour of human
being
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beings
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, because we need to survive
to
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social pressure and
this
is an important factor in their acts.
In addition
,
fashion
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the fashion
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industry
sell
is create
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to
people
copy the different models either their clothes or anything that
their
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they're
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dressed like
jewleries
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jewelries
jewelleries
.
Besides
,
this
show as
people
want to imitated the models because
this
bussines
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business
is one the biggest in the world. In conclusion, the capacity of
human
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being
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beings
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to copy each other is a natural behaviour and I agree. I could say that in the vogue
industry
we can see
that is
a
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good
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goo
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good
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example because their
sells
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sales
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are
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extremely
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hight
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high
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • conform
  • social norms
  • evolutionary psychology
  • survival
  • advertising
  • influencer marketing
  • celebrity endorsements
  • trends
  • followers
  • psychological comfort
  • social ostracism
  • mass production
  • high-end fashion
  • uniformity
  • cultural homogenization
  • globalization
  • media
  • spread
  • affordable
  • imitate
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