1.Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance leaning from the internet than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of development outgoing the disadvantages?

Nowadays,many
universities
and colleges have not allowed
students
to learn in school due to the COVID-19 pandemic.
Therefore
, the qualifications are now given to
students
through
distance
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leaning
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instead
of teaching in the classroom. I think the advantages of
this
development outweigh the
disadvantages
. Some
people
believe that
students
cannot master the skills and knowledge due to a lack of
teacher
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teachers
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to monitor them while learning. They claim
distance
education
cannot create a positive surrounding, which will cause their grades to be very poor.
Additionally
,
students
who live at home might not communicate with classmates and friends
face
to
face
as often, resulting in relationships becoming weaker and not staying in touch. Despite the
disadvantages
mentioned above, I think there are two main
reasons
why some
people
think the merits outweigh the
disadvantages
.
First
,
students
in
universities
should not be worried about where they learn and their living fees.
For example
, if international
students
could get their diplomas via the internet,
this
means that they could live in their comfortable house and save costs on accommodation.
Secondly
, with online
education
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it is easy to communicate directly to tutors and teachers about academic questions, doubts, and assignments are easy to find. These advantages could enhance the effects
from
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studying and teaching. I think remote
education
could
also
give an equal opportunity to some
students
that come from poverty to educate them. In conclusion, for the above
reasons
, I think we gain more from learning on the Internet than we may lose. Nowadays,many
universities
and colleges did not allow that
students
learn in school due to the COVID-19.
Therefore
, the qualifications are given to
students
through
the
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distance
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learning
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leaning
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learning
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instead
of teaching in the classroom. I think the advantages of
development
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the development
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outweigh the
disadvantages
. Some
people
believe that
students
could not master the skills and knowledge due to no teacher to monitor them to learn and
distance
education
cannot create
a positive surroundings
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, which will cause that their grades were very poor.
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,
students
who lived in their own home might
cannot
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communicate with classmates and friends
face
to
face
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resulting
the
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relationships would become weak and not in close touch. Despite the
disadvantages
mentioned above, I think there are two main
reasons
why some
people
would think the merits outweigh defects.
Firstly
,
students
in
universities
did not be worried about where they learn and their living fees .
For example
, the international
students
, if they could get the diplomas via the
education
online and
this
mean
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that they could live in their comfortable house and save the
amount
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of costs from
accommodation
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.
secondly
,
online
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education
, it is easy to commute directly to tutors and teachers to talk about the academic questions and doubts,
also
the assignment
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easy to allocate and select. These could enhance effects from the studying and teaching. I think remote
education
could give
the
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equal right to some
students
that came from
the
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poverty areas to make them
to
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acquire knowledge. In conclusion, for all
reasons
above, I think we gain more from learning on the Internet than we lose.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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