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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. What are the problems? What should governments and individuals do to tackle these problems?

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These days, people are increasingly migrating from the countryside to large metropolises in search of work or in the hope of having a better life, resulting in
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overcrowding in the areas.
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 there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of
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 trend, solutions can be taken to mitigate these potential
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. It is obvious that there are a number of issues related to
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 trend. One of the main
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 is
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 congestion. When the
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 of residents in major cities increases, a large volume of vehicles can be used to help them commute on a daily basis.
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 can lead to
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 jams, especially during rush hours. Another one is that people living in metropolitan areas can suffer from environmental degradation.
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 of exhaust fumes released from numerous modes of transport as well as a great deal of waste discharged into the habitat.
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, there are several actions that could be taken to solve the
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 mentioned above.
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, governments should spend national budgets on urban planning so as to facilitate travel.
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, they may build various lanes and bridges in
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 that people could have more space to move. Meanwhile, individuals need to comply with
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 rules.
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, it is important for governments to raise people’s awareness of protecting the environment.
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, they can encourage individuals to use
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 vehicles
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 as bicycles to reduce excessive emissions. At the same time, citizens should try to recycle or reuse things so that environmental pollution can be minimized dramatically. In conclusion, there are two pressing
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the overcrowding in metropolitan areas today, namely overcrowded
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 and environmental contamination. To deal with these issues effectively, it is necessary for governments to invest money in city planning and motivate urban dwellers to live
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, while individuals should be more aware of
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 their surroundings.
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