Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, it is argued that business
knowledge
and scientific research should be shared unconditionally. Some individuals believe that the more widespread
information
the more benefits they will receive.
However
,
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suggest that it should be accessible under some conditions.
This
essay will demonstrate both sides of the
ideas
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. Being
freely
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to share
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scientific
knowledge
can help people overcome their problems. To illustrate, if the undeveloped country cannot receive the medical research about the Covid-19's vaccine, it is impossible for them to get the vaccine for their people.
This
information
can help them to solve
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situation
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in their country.
Moreover
, in terms of
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, the business
information
which is shared freely can help the poor to improve their abilities to become a millionaire.
On the other hand
, without condition, the spread of
information
is out of control. When everyone can easily access
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whichever
knowledge
they want, it is impossible for
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to manage.
As a result
,
this
will lead to terrible situations in the future.
For example
, when the
information
about the discovery of the new species is being shared without any
permissions
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, some people will take advantage of
this
knowledge
by registering it as their own achievement.
Therefore
, they will take all of the credit themselves.
In other words
, the more freedom of releasing the facts, the more hazardous of being used.
In addition
, some important facts
such
as diplomatic or currency trading should be asked for permission before being announced because they will turn into
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terrible situations in the long run. In conclusion, having considered
this
matter carefully,
although
the freedom of
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give some benefits, I personally suggest that the valuable
knowledge
should be restricted to share freely in order to prevent the several terrible effects in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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