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The Internet has made a positive impact on our life. Do you agree or disagree?

#internet #impact #life
In today's modern era, nobody can imagine life without
internet
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Internet
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 totally changed our lifestyle. All
human
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 are dependent
to
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 computers
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these days.
This
 makes our life easier. I am partially agreed
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 the given notion. In my perspective, it has more advantages
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 disadvantages. In the following, paragraphs we will discuss in
details
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detail
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. At the
first
 glance, through
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social
websites
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 everyone feels connected. To explain it, the majority of people have
their
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 social account where they can upload their daily routine tasks
such
 as
,
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 images or videos.
For example
, if someone is living abroad, he or she can talk to their parents through video
call
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 on
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
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 or through other applications.
Thus
, they feel they are talking
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face to face with them.
In addition
 to it,
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the internet
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 is a great source of
information
. To illustrate it, students can find study materials by surfing the
internet
 at
anytime
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any time
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 or from any corner of the world.
Furthermore
, it provides not only
the
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information
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it
also
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is also
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 very useful for entertainment like, playing video games or watching movies or doing shopping.
Although
 having beneficial factors, it
also
 has some demerits.
Firstly
, adults and children are using it all
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day as they
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are addict
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 to it. Which is not good for their health.
Moreover
, no doubt they learn many things from the
internet
 but from the long
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 they develop
heath
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health
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 issues i.e. obesity, weak
eye sight
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eyesight
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 and slow brain and so on. Another most important negative point is false
information
.
Sometime
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, users put wrong
information
 on
internet
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the internet
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 that may cause
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fraud or misleading.
To
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 conclusion,
Internet
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the Internet
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 is a wider platform where you can find any
information
, play games, video calls,
online
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do online
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 shopping or
chatting
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 at very low rates. But be careful
or
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 false
information
 and parents should limit the time for their children and keep an eye on their search history to avoid any loss.
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