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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#inventors #society #doctors
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Inventors
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 create new things that improve our
lives
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 whereas
doctors
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 save
lives
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. Some
people
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 argue that
inventors
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 are of less importance than
doctors
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. I do not agree with you as both of them play an equally important role in the well-being of
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society. Without
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inventors
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 we will not have most of the amenities that we take for granted today. From fire to electricity and wheels to aeroplanes, all the essentials and amenities that we enjoy today are the contributions of
inventors
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. If these things had not been invented, we would still be living in caves hunting animals with stone tools. So, obviously, for whatever progress that we have achieved so far, the credit goes to
inventors
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.
On the other hand
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,
doctors
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 are important too as they save precious
lives
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. Without health care, it is not possible to live a long and fulfilling life.
People
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 who do not live long cannot achieve much in life. Everyone falls ill from time to time and if there were no
doctors
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, it would be difficult for
people
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 to live a long life. Now that medical science has developed a lot, it is common for
people
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 to live well into their 80’s and 90’s and
this
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 would not have been possible without the hard work and dedication of
doctors
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. After analysing the situation, it is not hard to see that both
doctors
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 and
inventors
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 play equally important but distinctly different roles in our
lives
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. Like everyone else,
inventors
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 depend on
doctors
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 for healthcare.
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,
doctors
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 take advantage of a lot of inventions to offer effective treatments to their patients.
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, in my opinion, both are indispensable and it is not possible to say that one is more important than the other.
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