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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a notion that the invention of
computers
 has become one of the most essential milestones of the
last
 century.
This
 essay will demonstrate that over the past several
decades
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computers
 have indeed become an integral part of our lives.
First
 of all, the invention of
computers
 has allowed people to advance space exploration by providing error-free calculations in a matter of seconds.
For example
, before
computers
, NASA had a whole department of mathematicians that was responsible for calculating probabilities of spacecraft landing trajectory. These complex calculations could take up to several months, with no insurance from human errors, making space exploration life-threatening for the astronauts.
However
, with the help of
computers
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 NASA was able to make all the landing preparations in several hours.
As a result
, NASA managed to get to the forefront of the Space Race.
Furthermore
, due to the development of
computers
, medical scientists were able to diagnose illnesses in the early stages, but
also
 assist in the treatment of old ones. Recently there was news about a blind woman that successfully underwent surgery in Sweden. With the help of complex computations performed by
computers
, the surgeons managed to implant a chip into the woman's brain that allowed her to see once again, after over ten years.
Thus
, the latest medical technology allows doctors to save and prolong more lives. In conclusion, the invention of
computers
 has truly become the most valuable part
in
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 the history of humanity.
This
 technology allowed people to save lives through medical inventions and explore places beyond Earth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invention
  • revolutionized
  • industries
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • advancements
  • scientific research
  • technology
  • access
  • information
  • learn
  • limitations
  • disadvantages
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