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the alteration of the place from 1986 to the present.

The given maps illustrate the alteration of the place from 1986 to the present. The general overview here is that there is a noticeable discrepancy between the two maps after the construction takes place. According to the
first
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 map, it can be seen that the town consisted of the only one main
road
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 running from the north to the south along with the two shops, a post office and a farm to the left side which was the river
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 to it.
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, there was a large house with a garden and a primary school and farmland on the right of the main
road
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, with the bridge across the river to the north. In the present, the farmland on the left side of the main
road
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 has been gone to make way for a new circular pattern street, on the opposite side, the large house has been turned into a retirement house with where its garden stood there is now a new small
road
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.
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, the farmland to the north has been
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 disappeared to make room for a new street and the expanded school. The shops have all gone, being replaced by a new small
road
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. It is noticeable the bridge remains unaffected.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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