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Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The presence of large international companies is increasing one day after another and tons of people may not think
this
 has a positive impact on the
planet
. Industries can definitely generate pollution but they
also
 offer more job opportunities and
collaborte
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collaborate
 with studies which create technologies to fight against the environmental degradation of the world. There is no doubt that multinational companies due to their size produce a lot of garbage and
emane
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many
 prejudicial gases that
harms
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 the ozone layer, which can be very dangerous to the
planet
.
Envinronmentalists
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Environmentalists
 worry about how
this
 can affect our and our
families'
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families
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 lives in the future.
On the other hand
, the amount of money these industries make can be invested in research, which is why new technologies have the chance of being discovered, new
cientists
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scientists
 are being hired, all for the best interest of the
planet
. With more investment and knowledge available, more careful and worried the big employers will be, making a better future for all the population. That being said, I believe that education and development is always the best way to achieve a goal. That's why I don't think
the
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multinationals are harming the
planet
 more than helping it. Without those companies the world would not function the same and thousands of people would be unemployed. The most important thing to do is put the money on the right side, investing in ways to reduce
the
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pollution.
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