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the British people spent time on their habit between 1971 and 2001.

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The given pie charts illustrate the information about the British people spent time on their habit between 1971 and 2001. Overall, in 1971 petrol was the most spending habit of the UK people, While the number of cars was highest after passing 30 years. According to the charts, it can be seen that in 1971, the majority of spending habit of Britain occupied by petrol with 44%, followed by cars with the figure 22%. There was a significant movement in 2001, the number of the petrol dropped dramatically to only 14%, while there was a remarkable escalation of the cars figures, accounting for 43% three decades later.
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, the number of computers and restaurants shared a similar upward trend, with computers rising from only 2% in 1971 to 12% in 2001 and restaurants was doubled from 7% in 1971.
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, furniture and food experience a slight fall from 9% and 10% in 1971 respectively to 8% in each throughout the period, whereas books indicated a noticeable decline to only 1% over the period observed.
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