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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened, and that you want your money back. Things to include: – Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. – Polite. No one responds to insults. – Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? – Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

#restaurant #manager #money #facts #insults #outline #firmness
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 to share my experience of visiting your restaurant
last
 Sunday. I had come for dinner with my family after my friend recommended the place. To be honest, I really liked the place as it was well organised and decorated beautifully.
However
, I was not at all happy with the service and food quality. While ordering I had mentioned keeping the spices less in my food but when I received my food to my surprise it was more spicey, and when I tried to confront the staff, they did not listen to me and said that they had prepared according to the instructions. I can understand, it was crowded that day and they would have mistaken my order with somebody else's, but I was disappointed with the negligence by the staff. I would request you to either give the money back that I spent on the bill that day or at least give me discount coupons for my
next
 visit. I do believe I should pay a
second
 visit as I felt the place was comfortable. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours truly, Kanwal
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