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Technology is destroying social interactions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#technology #interactions
Undoubtedly, technology has revolutionized the way we communicate these days. Some
people
 say that inventions like mobile phones are making
people
 less social. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 statement. To start with, the introduction of mobile phones is a blessing in disguise for
the
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people
.
As
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this
 invention immensely helped
people
 to strengthen their
relationship
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 with their loved ones living far away. Now they can easily do a face to face call anywhere and anytime.
Consequently
, they become more socially active. In the olden times,
people
 used to write letters or
telegram
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 which took a long time to reach their family members.
However
, now they can talk to any person immediately.
Moreover
,
the
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social messaging application
such
 as WhatsApp in smartphones
enables
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people
 to become part of many social groups.
Thus
, they become socially connected and grow a healthy social network with others.
Furthermore
, we have begun to interact with
people
who
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 we don’t know at all. A lot of applications these days help us connect with like-minded
people
.
Thus
, adding
on
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to our social circle. To introverts, technology has been a boon. It has helped them interact with
people
 without facing social anxiety at any cost. In conclusion, I assert that the reasonable use of a mobile phone is a boon to mankind and its excessive use can be a curse. So, it is up to
people
 to decide wisely how they want to use
this
 technology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual interactions
  • weaker social bonds
  • isolation
  • mental health
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • shallow relationships
  • reduced empathy
  • nuances of emotional expression
  • counterargument
  • physically unable
  • cross-cultural exchanges
  • interpersonal skills
  • communication technology
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