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Some people think that the government is wasting money on arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

#people #government #money #arts
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Everyone has their own opinion and concerns; I think that
art
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 an important aspect of life. We human beings are social animals. We need things that inspire us to help each other and live together. There could be many reasons why the
government
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 should spend money on
arts
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 and
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 why they should not. In my opinion,
art
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 is as important as any other
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 and should receive
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 support. There are several reasons why the
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 should spend money on the
arts
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. One of the main reasons is that
art
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 reflects the culture of a
country
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 and promotes
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’s understanding of their culture and architecture. Most of us are oblivious to our ancient cultures and traditions, and we look up to
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 to learn about our culture and heritage.
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, the
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 should invest in
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 as it acts as a revenue factor too.
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,
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 from outside the
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 come to see the historical buildings and by maintaining its artistic legacy, a
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 can encourage tourists to visit again and again.
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 practice boosts the tourism
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 and eventually the economic growth of a
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.
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, the
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sector
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 employs many
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.
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, artists like singers and dancers have a huge fan following. Their shows are watched by thousands of
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.
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 events employ hundreds of
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. Without
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 funding, many
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 forms will die down and that will be a huge loss for the
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.
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, spending on
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 should not be at the expense of other sectors like education, healthcare or
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. Those are certainly more important and
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 should receive funding too, but I believe that the
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sector
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 should not be neglected too. To conclude, I believe that the
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 should distribute its funds evenly to all sectors including
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 because every
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 has its contribution to the development of a
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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