Childhood obesity has become a serious problem in recent years. What are the primary causes of this? What measures should be taken to reduce childhood obesity?

Obesity
among
children
is considered to be a critical
health
problem these days, and while many factors might
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a role in its incidence, it can be tackled and alleviated by little adjustment of child's eating and
excersising
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exercising
habits.
First
, the recent increased average childrens' body
weight
is due to in part to the
unctrolled
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uncontrolled
consuming of sugary beverages and snacks , and to the sedentary
life style
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or lack of physical
excersise
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exercise
, in
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. It is noticed that eating habits have remarkably changed in the
last
two decades and the majority of
children
and
teenageers
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teenagers
, particularly in the western countries, are consuming thousands of gallons of sugary soft drinks on daily basis and
this
trend has
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to a rise in the average
weight
by more than 30 % among the youngsters.
Moreover
, the unprecedented demand for electronic games at the expense of
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activities plays a critical role in
children;s
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overweight per seen,
this
factor added to the increased intake calories are the main causes of
obesity
and related
health
peoblems
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problems
Second
,
although
children
's
obesity
turned out to be an outbreak, it is still not intractable to treatment by following two practical measurements.
First
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step is to launch
an
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rawarness
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awareness
campaign through
the
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social media and television ,to point out the problem , and to highlight
obesity related
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risk
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on
chil's
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child's
physical and psychological wellbeing .
This
campaign had to be funded by the
Menistry
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Ministry
of
Health
and might be supported by the concerned local facilities. In some countries where
children
's
obesity
reached
an alarming levels
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, a considerable decrease in the
children
's body mass index could be
acheived
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achieved
after displaying some videos of an
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weight
person struggling to climb
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stairs , in a famous
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restaurant chains.
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step
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is to encourage the youngsters to practice some kind of physical work out at least 2 times per week , and
this
to be included in
school's
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corriculum
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curriculum
. All students in
Japapn
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Japan
, as an example, have to start their day at school by some
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work out for minimum
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minutes. In conclusion, food rich in sugar and lack of physical
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exercise
are
main
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reasons behind the increased
children
's
weight
,
however
, school boards and the
Menistry
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Ministry
of
Health
can play an essential role to alleviate
this
problem , and many countries around the world could overcome
this
challenge.
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