You wanted to start your own business. Write a letter to a friend Tell him/her about your business Explain why you think it is a good idea Ask him/her help for some help or advice

Dear Angela, How are you doing these days? I really hope you and your family are doing fine. I wanted to share some exciting news with you. I took your advice and started planning my

business

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. As you are already aware of my interest in jewellery and accessories,

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I started creating a few handmade pieces which are absolutely gorgeous and are ideal

to sell

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for selling

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online and

make

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profits.

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it does seem risky I spend all the resources in order to start a new

business

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, it does provide great pleasure to be independent. Based on my research of the market, handmade objects are quite valued and provide great benefits.

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, I have decided to create more pieces and sell them online as it is a great platform to start small-scale businesses. I was hoping

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you could help me with the marketing aspect of the

business

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. I am well aware of your schedules

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your own

business

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but I

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be really glad if you could spare some time and endorse my products through your social media profile.

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would give my products huge publicity and a great start to be in competition. We can discuss

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in detail

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weekend. Looking forward to seeing you

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weekend! Warm wishes, Farhana Jabeen

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Nov 8, 2021

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve clarity and coherence.

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Expand more on why you think your business idea is good to provide further justification.

coherence and cohesion

Clear and friendly opening and closing.

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Appropriate tone throughout the letter, engaging the reader effectively.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

214 words

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You wanted to start your own business. Write a letter to a friend Tell him/her about your business Explain why you think it is a good idea Ask him/her help for some help or advice

Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to make vehicle drivers take a test every year. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, people believe that the environment influences their accomplishments. Some people think their success and accomplishment were influenced by the places where they grew up. Do you think the environment does or does not affect people’s accomplishment and how it affects?

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agre or disagree?

More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem.

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.