It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

In today’s world social medial has become an indispensable thing because everyone
are
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using it now and
everyday
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. It has both positive and negative sides but
actually
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it all depends on how we
use
the
internet
. In my perspective, if we
use
the
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social
media
in the right way so it will become a useful tool for
people
, but it might
brings
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some
drawback
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, too.
First
of all, we must acknowledge that social
media
has become the substitute
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face-to-face communication.
People
can keep in touch with each
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regardless of
geography
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locations.
For example
,
person
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the person
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who lives far apart
of
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their family can easily
use
the online contact method to update their latest news in life as soon as possible.
Second
, it is a huge source of information. By the large of social
media
users, they have been providing an extensive amount of information
such
as
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their knowledge or latest news about the particular major.
Otherwise
, the drawbacks of the
internet
are more concerning.
First
, it affects our health and mental.
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the
convinience
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convenience
of social
media
,
people
would be more
rely
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on the online platforms to contact together. Increased
used
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of electron devices leads to
the
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decreased
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of
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visual acuity and health.
Then
, bad guys can
use
Internet
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to do bad things.
For example
,
criminal
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criminals
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can
use
social
media
to commit
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the offence
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offence
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.
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it can trigger social ills
such
as
people
use
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using
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internet
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the internet
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to spread misinformation and cause social conflicts. In conclusion, social
media
now has associated with life. If we
use
it for
the
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positive purpose it will become more useful. Everything has its pros and cons, and how we
use
it is the most important.
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