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woman going into higher education in five various countries between 1980 and 2015.

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The given bar chart illustrates the information about the proportion of women going into higher education in five various countries between 1980 and 2015. The general overview here is that all five countries experienced an upward trend in their numbers of female school-leavers going into higher education over the period. According to the chart, it can be seen that Australia indicate the majority in amounts of women studying higher education, accounting for almost 60% in 1980, while there was around 50% which of
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 numbers in France. After passing 35 years, there was stability in the number of Australians
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, the figure of France rose slightly to approximately 55% in 2015.
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, a remarkable increase was seen in both The UK and The USA, with The UK rising from around 35% in 1980 to 54% in 2015, and The USA increasing from just under 49% to almost 60% in the same period.
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, there was a steady increase for South Korea, rising from only 15% to exactly 30% throughout the period observed.
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