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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via Internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion

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In the present scenario, the
Internet
 plays a
curcial
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crucial
 role in every person life and we can not think about our lives without the
internet
. It is very easy to shop and
work
 online because of the
internet
. In my opinion, I considered that there are both merits and demerits of using the
internet
. There are many reasons why
people
 prefer online shopping via the
internet
. The
first
 and foremost important thing is saving time. Both women and men are working so they can not spend time
for
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shopping.
In addition
, the
internet
 is a convenient option for shopping.
For example
,
people
 do not need to go physically
a
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shopping mall or a local store for shopping because they can easily shop from online websites and applications by using the
interent
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internet
.
Therefore
, the
internet
 gives immense benefits to
people
. Another point to consider is that the
internet
 has become an indispensable part of everyone.
People
 can do
work
 from home without going to the office through the
interent
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internet
.
Moreover
,
people
 communicate with their friends and family who live in any corner of the world.
For instance
, the one survey has conducted by a professor at
Harwad
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Harvard
Harward
 University, there are 70% of
people
 across the world use the
internet
 for
work
 and communication without getting
trouble
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.
Hence
, the
internet
 is helpful in both ways individuals and professionals.
On the other hand
, the
internet
 has
also
negative
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 development.
Firstly
,
people
 would not give importance to face-to-face conversation.
Secondly
, employees do not
work
 properly at home because they do not have employer pressure.
Finally
,
people
 will forget the amazing experience of physical shopping. In conclusion,
internet
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 is a very useful and necessary element in modern life as it gives more advantages to the world, but some drawbacks should not be neglected
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